Poem: «T E M P L E S»

(photo property of FBC, Omnia Caelum Studios Valencia, All Rights Reserved)

My skin absorbs the dust of frozen centuries,

the dust remains like footprints in the sand,

and I stand frozen like a marbled drop of yellow rain.

“TEMPLES” is a poem in what I have termed the Euro-Ku.  This style borrows the name and part of the idea that gave form to the traditional Japanese Haiku.  However, I have changed most of the rules that govern the composition of that well known form. In the Euro-Ku the verses…they are still only three…do not have to have the same syllable count as in the Haiku.  The three verses should flow into each other in a coherent and obvious fashion and should be written in the contemporary vernacular, as if one were writing the lyrics of a pop song.  The meaning and the message should be intended for the proletariat; clearly understood by all.  It should not be hidden within confusing and archaic…researched…words.

C.2022, Francisco Bravo Cabrera, 22/02/2022, Valencia, Spain

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  1. Avatar de Brad Osborne Brad Osborne dice:

    A wonderful modern take on the classic traditional form. Love the creativity, my friend!

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    1. Thank you very, very much my friend!

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  2. Avatar de macalder02 macalder02 dice:

    No he transitado el camino de los Haikus por las reglas tan estrictas, pero al crear Euro-Ku, le das una nueva forma, mas libertad en los versos. Bien por tu creatividad. Mis felicitaciones Francisco.

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    1. Gracias mi amigo Manuel. A mi siempre me fascinaron los Haiku pero no me gustaban las restricciones tampoco ni me sentía identificado con el pensamiento oriental. Ahora queda que alguien…un poeta como tu…desarrolle el Ameri-Ku en español. Que te parece? Un saludo,
      Francisco

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      1. Avatar de macalder02 macalder02 dice:

        Sin lugar a dudas que lo voy a intentar.

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      2. Venga! Se que harás de maravillas. Un saludo.

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      3. Avatar de macalder02 macalder02 dice:

        Gracias Francisco.

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  3. Avatar de spwilcen spwilcen dice:

    Rules here are admirable. This example speaks well of he form.

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    1. Thank you so much my friend!

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  4. Avatar de jonicaggiano jonicaggiano dice:

    This is such a beautiful Euro-Ku. The photograph along with your amazingly gorgeous words give you a sense of being along side you looking at this beautiful old building. Sending love to you both. ❤️🤗🦋🙏

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    1. Thank you 😊 so very much Joni! Love, peace and happiness to you both always!

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      1. Avatar de jonicaggiano jonicaggiano dice:

        You are most welcome. Big hugs to you both. ❤️🤗

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